soft tissues, made of spectral white,
my sense turns liquid, drinkin' night’s
moist breath, i feel exposed and thin,
take cautious steps towards the rim
and balance on diffusing light
when rainbow hazes wrap us in
soft tissues, made of spectral white
so soar upon cleft edges, spin
and glide, do love me mad and fight
this slipping groove, we reach the height
just as our shapes fade pale and slim
when rainbow hazes wrap us in.
22 Comments:
Hi Claudia,
as usual you are brillaint with your magical. words which creates the image live.
Glad yo have you.
take care.
This is really masterful use of the form. You have tremendous talent.
Another masterpiece from the great poet, I love your rondel, mastery uses of words, thanks for sharing this with us.
when rainbow hazes wrap us in.
Who wouldn't want a cloak like that? LOL
you paint a beautiful picture my friend...so if we return next year, you are going to be here right? met dustus last night...so cool...finding the moon today...smiles. nice job on the form....
Beautiful imagery! gives me goosebumps.
Love this, especially
...spin
and glide, do love me mad and fight
this slipping groove,...
Great rondel.
Sounds romantic to me! :)
You made this feel effortless. Just beautiful.
Masterful, effortless, your creative use of punctuation make it feel free form rather than set and the form is like a jazz riff taking us through a spectrum of love. I so love your poetry Claudia. Thank you! Gay
Excellent--you have the perfect cadence, making the words tumble out in a relationship that feeds both form and the pleasure of the mind in words, sense and rhythm. One of your best, in every way, Claudia.
I so enjoy the repetitive nature of this form and the way you weave your poetry with unforgettable images.
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Thanks for letting me know , I have enabled the comment section now , yesterday I was tweaking over my blog and comment section got disabled ;).
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so very lovely...
Wonderful!You write rondels really well.Thanks for correcting me!I have done the corrections ...
Very much a romantic dance...
Beautiful romantic piece... thanks for setting the mark so well.
I enjoy what i read here, i am sure i wanna come back for more,, take care now and god bless ya
so light, yet steeped in a set rhythm ..as a reader, I was amazed by its visual beauty, as a student of the form, I was amazed at what can be done ~thank you
Beautiful - - and I discovered why my Rondel poem is marred. I was following an incorrect model. LOL.
LOVE that and am so appreciative of your edits to help me make it "right"...
Can't expect anything less than perfect structure here - and you pull it off well. What is intriguing is imagining what your words describe - the swirl of wine in a glass that refracts the light, the edge of a skater whirling on ice - and maybe all of these things, well-poised and colourfully rich.
Lovely poem. I was initially wondering what it was all about. But then I read it again keeping in mind a glass of white wine and everything fell in place and the beauty of your work was unravelled.
Also thanks for the feedback on my work.
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